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考官看了作文想打人系列:雅思写作中最容易被扣分的常见开头

Mira  2017-03-27



烤鸭の指南系列






今天我们来聊一波雅思写作。


很多烤鸭N刷的时候都会发现一个令人痛心的事实,那就是,写作投入产出比太特么低了。

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为什么你看了那么技巧,积累了那么多词汇,然而还是没有什么卵用?

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这很可能是因为,考官看了你的作文开头就怒扣了一笔。

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话不多说,快来跟AI一起避开这些考官看了想打人的大坑,重新做鸭。

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扣分第一式:中式英语


Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life


血案:In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……


Topic2-Is there fairness in today’s business world?


血案:I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……


Topic 3-The advantage of being a nice person


Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always dobad things, he will get “bao ying”.


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扣分第二式:观点模糊态度暧昧


Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?


血案:I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……


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扣分第三式:偏离主题


Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? 


血案:I think we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.


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扣分第四式:语法错误惨不忍睹


Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents acceptresponsibility and also be punished?


血案:About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents arenot right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. 


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扣分第五式:过分简单没有重点


Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?


血案:This issue is very important, let’s talk about it!


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扣分第六式:意思重复原地踏步


Topic-Your opinion on DINK families


血案:My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. Andit is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimesharmful to our society.


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扣分第七式:中国俗语胡乱翻译


Topic-Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/herfamily?


血案:Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, chicken bore chicken, mouse’s son can make hole.


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扣分第八式:观点武断 态度强硬


Topic-The solution to the traffic problem


血案:I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obeythe traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’msure there will be no traffic problem any more.


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好了,今天烤鸭指南就到这里,我们下期再会~




原文素材来源:新浪教育

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